Common Changing and Improving mistakes — and how to fix them

Most weak Changing and Improving statements fail in predictable ways. Here are the seven mistakes assessors see most often, each with a straightforward fix you can apply to your own draft today.

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Why these mistakes cost marks

Changing and Improving fails differently from other behaviours. With Delivering at Pace, weak statements are usually just vague. With this behaviour, they are often negative: the writer sounds like they endured change, complained about it, or watched it happen. Assessors read that as evidence against the behaviour, not for it.

The good news is that most of these problems are drafting problems, not experience problems. The example is usually fine; the telling needs work.

Read the list below against your draft before you look at the fixes. Most people recognise two or three of their own habits immediately — that is normal, and it is what revision is for.

The seven mistakes

These are the patterns that most often drag Changing and Improving statements down the scale. Each comes with a fix you can apply before you submit.

Common mistake

Mistake 1: Describing a change that happened to you, not one you shaped. Fix: choose an example where you spotted, suggested or actively supported the change. Rewrite the actions with 'I' and name what you did, in order.

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Mistake 2: Claiming openness to feedback without showing it. Fix: include one concrete moment where someone gave you feedback and you changed your approach. The adjustment is the evidence.

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Mistake 3: Writing 'we' throughout the action. Fix: assessors score you, not your team. Keep 'we' for context and make every action sentence start with 'I did'.

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Mistake 4: No numbers in the result. Fix: find one honest measure: time saved, errors reduced, people affected, money saved. Estimate fairly and say 'around' or 'roughly'.

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Mistake 5: Criticising colleagues who resisted change. Fix: resistance is a chance to show leadership. Describe how you listened, involved the person, and adapted the plan — never how wrong they were.

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Mistake 6: Change for its own sake. Fix: link the improvement to a real problem: waste, delay, errors, frustration. A change with no 'why' reads as restlessness, not improvement.

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Mistake 7: Burying the improvement at the end. Fix: say what you changed by the end of the second action sentence. Assessors skim; make the improvement impossible to miss.

Check your own draft

After your first draft, test it against this list. Read the action section aloud and count how many sentences start with 'I'. Find the sentence where you changed your mind because of feedback — if there is not one, add it. Then check the result has at least one number.

Tip

Ask someone who does not know your job to read the statement and tell you what you personally changed. If they cannot answer in one sentence, your ownership is not clear enough.

Finally, make sure the example is honest. Assessors interview afterwards, and an inflated story unravels quickly under a simple follow-up question.

Give yourself time for at least one full rewrite. Strong statements are rarely written; they are rewritten, usually by cutting the context in half and doubling the action detail.

A quick rewrite, before and after

Weak: 'Our rotas were a mess, so management brought in a new system and after some teething problems it worked much better.' Nothing here tells the assessor what the writer did.

Stronger: 'I mapped where our rota clashes came from, suggested trialling the new system on my team first, and fed back three fixes during the pilot. Clashes dropped from eleven a week to two.' Same change, visible person.

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